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Started by Solomon Zorn, September 15, 2013, 02:32:56 AM

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Solomon Zorn

Thanks. "Fingers" got shot down in my first contest, when I thought it would at least make the finalists, so I don't have my hopes up.

It was a little edgy though, I think,  for the judge's taste.

“Fingers”
Solomon Zorn

Fingers chopped off,
In the shredder,
Little girl
Asks her mother,

“Will the Lord,
With his great power,
Make them grow back
In an hour?”

“Will he hear me
When I pray,
Make them grow back
In a day?”

“Tell me mother,
Be sincere,
Will they grow back
In a year?”

Mother doesn't
Dare reply,
With some
Condescending lie.

As her daughter
Bows to pray,
Mother has
No words to say.

God should give
An explanation,
For this
Senseless amputation.

God should tell her
His intention,
When withholding
Intervention.

Leaving fingers
To be severed,
Tell her why
They're gone forever.

Mother swallows
Past a lump
Seeing tragic
Little stump

Hand and nub
Are posed in prayer
To a God
That isn't there
If God Exists, Why Does He Pretend Not to Exist?
Poetry and Proverbs of the Uneducated Hick

http://www.solomonzorn.com

Mike Cl

I like it--and it is edgy.  And if the judges are theistic, then you are dead before you start.  But yeah, I really do like it. 
Is God willing to prevent evil, but not able?<br />Then he is not omnipotent,<br />Is he able but not willing?<br />Then whence cometh evil?<br />Is he neither able or willing?<br />Then why call him god?

Solomon Zorn

It was entered in the "Favorite Poem" contest. I selected this one, because I have seen two different people (one a man and one a woman), get choked up a little at the end.

It's over though. Here's the winner:
http://allpoetry.com/poem/11907219-A-Letter-up-to-Heaven-by-Louise..xx-noguest
If God Exists, Why Does He Pretend Not to Exist?
Poetry and Proverbs of the Uneducated Hick

http://www.solomonzorn.com

Solomon Zorn

Well, I just won bronze in a "Dark Micro-Poem" contest (under 50 words). Here is the poem:



"Pleasure Center"
Solomon Zorn

A tiny little dose,
My paradise is close,
When smoking my cocaine.

I kiss the bliss I missed,
An alabaster mist,
That's stroking-off my brain.

But soon the soul atones,
And moans away the jones,
Until the next refrain.




I had a short-lived habit, about 15 years ago, but I don't have anything to do with the stuff anymore.
If God Exists, Why Does He Pretend Not to Exist?
Poetry and Proverbs of the Uneducated Hick

http://www.solomonzorn.com

Mike Cl

Quote from: Solomon Zorn on May 24, 2015, 05:07:00 PM
Well, I just won bronze in a "Dark Micro-Poem" contest (under 50 words). Here is the poem:



"Pleasure Center"
Solomon Zorn

A tiny little dose,
My paradise is close,
When smoking my cocaine.

I kiss the bliss I missed,
An alabaster mist,
That's stroking-off my brain.

But soon the soul atones,
And moans away the jones,
Until the next refrain.




I had a short-lived habit, about 15 years ago, but I don't have anything to do with the stuff anymore.
Congrats!  I like the one that won, but I like Fingers better. :)
Is God willing to prevent evil, but not able?<br />Then he is not omnipotent,<br />Is he able but not willing?<br />Then whence cometh evil?<br />Is he neither able or willing?<br />Then why call him god?

Unbeliever

Wow Sol, you've been busy!  :super:

I like the ones you've posted so far. I wonder how many more you've got? Have you tried putting some of them to music?

The True Sky was right on - especially the final bit about making the sky our home.

Just...WOW!

I've got a short one I'll post later, after I peruse the other recent posts.
God Not Found
"There is a sucker born-again every minute." - C. Spellman

Unbeliever

Here's one of my all time favorites, by a fellow named Phil George, that I thought y'all might like:


BATTLE WON IS LOST

They said, "You are no longer a lad."
I nodded.
They said, "Enter the council lodge."
I sat.
They said, "Our lands are at stake."
I scowled.
They said, "We are at war."
I hated.
They said, "Prepare red war symbols."
I painted.
They said, "Count coups."
I scalped.
They said, "You'll see friends die."
I cringed.
They said, "Desperate warriors fight best."
I charged.
They said, "Some will be wounded."
I bled.
They said, "To die is glorious."
They lied.
God Not Found
"There is a sucker born-again every minute." - C. Spellman

Mike Cl

Quote from: Unbeliever on May 27, 2015, 06:36:45 PM
Here's one of my all time favorites, by a fellow named Phil George, that I thought y'all might like:


BATTLE WON IS LOST

They said, "You are no longer a lad."
I nodded.
They said, "Enter the council lodge."
I sat.
They said, "Our lands are at stake."
I scowled.
They said, "We are at war."
I hated.
They said, "Prepare red war symbols."
I painted.
They said, "Count coups."
I scalped.
They said, "You'll see friends die."
I cringed.
They said, "Desperate warriors fight best."
I charged.
They said, "Some will be wounded."
I bled.
They said, "To die is glorious."
They lied.
You are right, I liked.
Is God willing to prevent evil, but not able?<br />Then he is not omnipotent,<br />Is he able but not willing?<br />Then whence cometh evil?<br />Is he neither able or willing?<br />Then why call him god?

Unbeliever

OK, I've gotta go soon, so here's one I just finished:


What Next?


At first, there were only particles and fields
that clumped into atoms in the void
that fused in the stars to become all the elements
that then accreted into molecules galore
that developed into life of countless breeds
that complexified into mind of great imagination...
I wonder -
What might be next in this series?
God Not Found
"There is a sucker born-again every minute." - C. Spellman

Unbeliever

Quote from: Mike Cl on May 27, 2015, 08:08:09 PM
You are right, I liked.

That's a poem I came across in maybe 7th grade. It's almost the only poetry I recall from so long ago!
God Not Found
"There is a sucker born-again every minute." - C. Spellman

Mr.Obvious

#265
I am the emperor

As my own swindlers weave my mind;
to the truth they tend to keep me blind.
Yet no amount of velvet cloth can hide,
my own vanity on par with Satan's pride.
But with my fears exposed I feel alright
as long as your arms hold me tight.


Open to improvement, as per your opinion.
Inspired bya quote: 'What we want is someone to be naked with, not only in body, but in soul'. By J. Iron Word.
Also inspired by Hans Christian Andersen's 'The Emperor's New Clothes'.
"If we have to go down, we go down together!"
- Your mum, last night, requesting 69.

Atheist Mantis does not pray.

Brian37

 License And Registration Please, By Brian37 (AKA Brian James Rational Poet on FB and @Brianrrs37 on twitter)



Just a moment ago

I received a call

My mom was worried

About my vehicle



My itinarary

Was to get legal

My vehicle

Before my plates expired



So this morning

I did just that

Got it inspected

And paid my taxes



And once I did

They gave me a sticker

Denoting next year's

Experation date



And dutifly I did

In the parking lot

Put the sticker

On my license plate



Now finished

On the way home

Stopped by my mom's

To tell her I was done



After our chat

She watched me leave

But somthing bothered her

Looking at my bumper



Improperly placed

Or it fell off

That sticker required

Is what she thought



Insistent she was

That I go out

To the front of my house

To check it out



So I did

To placate her

Knowing sure well

I had done it correctly



It is the false perception

We evolved with

The the brain gap fills

With out us realizing



It is why

Humans once thought

That angry volcano

Was a god



It is why

Dawkins is right

That god is a result

Of our flawed perceptions



Amused I was

But thankful too

That she bothered to call

To make sure

(end)

Also posted at my host poetry thread at Rational Reponders, post #733 here  http://www.rationalresponders.com/forum/31771?page=14

I wrote this after a phone call from my mom who was worried that I messed something up in the process of getting my vehicle legal. Nice she was worried, but it was a false perception of what she thought she saw on the back of my vehicle for whatever reason.
"We are a nation of Christians and Muslims, Jews and Hindus -- and nonbelievers." Obama
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Solomon Zorn

Quote from: Mr.Obvious on May 29, 2015, 06:51:07 AM
I am the emperor

As my own swindlers weave my mind;
to the truth they tend to keep me blind.
Yet no amount of velvet cloth can hide,
my own vanity on par with Satan's pride.
But with my fears exposed I feel alright
as long as your arms hold me tight.


Open to improvement, as per your opinion.
Inspired bya quote: 'What we want is someone to be naked with, not only in body, but in soul'. By J. Iron Word.
Also inspired by Hans Christian Andersen's 'The Emperor's New Clothes'.
I don't know about this one, O. I usually try to stick to just one simple idea with a micro-poem. You're going to need some more space to bring together the vanity idea of The Emperor's New Clothes, with the tenderness of the quote from J. Iron Word.

Maybe a longer poem exploring the vanity of clothing in general, told as a love poem for the empress. What do you think?
If God Exists, Why Does He Pretend Not to Exist?
Poetry and Proverbs of the Uneducated Hick

http://www.solomonzorn.com

Mr.Obvious

Quote from: Solomon Zorn on June 01, 2015, 01:56:38 PM
I don't know about this one, O. I usually try to stick to just one simple idea with a micro-poem. You're going to need some more space to bring together the vanity idea of The Emperor's New Clothes, with the tenderness of the quote from J. Iron Word.

Maybe a longer poem exploring the vanity of clothing in general, told as a love poem for the empress. What do you think?

I can definitely feel that.  I agree it is... Cramped.  But it was for a Max 50 words contest; perhaps i was overambitious. Might stretch it out and give it time to breathe once The contest is over.
"If we have to go down, we go down together!"
- Your mum, last night, requesting 69.

Atheist Mantis does not pray.

Solitary

Quote from: Unbeliever on May 27, 2015, 05:53:53 PM
Wow Sol, you've been busy!  :super:

I like the ones you've posted so far. I wonder how many more you've got? Have you tried putting some of them to music?

The True Sky was right on - especially the final bit about making the sky our home.

Just...WOW!

I've got a short one I'll post later, after I peruse the other recent posts.
Thanks, you're too kind.
There is nothing more frightful than ignorance in action.